Top 3 Writing Tips - Mr.Shokhrukh and Mr.Alex

[Music] so right now I'm going to give you a second look to your left look to your right find your partner right now okay does everybody have one partner if it's three people that's also okay and one more thing today we're going to have a group activity [Music] and remember the most important thing you need to have a team name and I uh I wrote this essay how many paragraphs do you think this essay should have repeat after me close no [Music] if you have some friends good if you don't have friends it's time to start making friends now you have a good opportunity some people say six some people say seven but I I say roughly five that's like my you know classic number and these are the essay types that we're going to be talking about today do you understand the task please raise your hand if you understand the task foreign that's my greatest pleasure to see here in this moment in a moment where we're all gazering as I say all the time was one purpose to share and to gain knowledge so today we have two master classes and one person is very very familiar to me um so that's going to be I can say one of the greatest time ever you will ever have in your preparation for English for the IELTS exam as well because we have two great topics that's gonna help that are going to really help you to boost your vocabulary to boost your skills in writing and Etc so uh before getting to details I want first of all um in white in my first of all the Hat of uh you brought project a person who made this event possible on the stage for the opening speech [Applause] assalamu alaikum everyone thank you for giving me that opportunity to stand again in front of you and then speak thanks God that uh give me the another chance to live in to share the knowledge the spirit knowledge but I was surprised to see the seats free yet but we've been doing a master class like 9 or 10 time right uh once you finish these seminars I really want you to spread that because the well I graduate from the marketing business management and this is where I've been taught like a word of mouse is a free marketing tool where you can you can use that one so I really want you to uh spread that to uh to ask someone to come with you at least to do the Good Deeds because we have the greatest speakers and we've been trying to do to make your day as much as we can as possible and let me give that opportunity for two speakers today to to take advantage full advantage of these days thank you very much um thank you okay now it is high time for me to invite our first speaker on the stage and he is actually the second time being here guys which is already a sign of of what kind of great speaker he is so he is himself an native speaker and he's going to teach you how to write like a native in a natural way so let's meet Alex with great Applause hello everyone uh it is very nice to see you here I am as um Master hobek said I am here for the second time and it is a great pleasure to be here and see all of you once again ready to learn ready to see new things uh let's get two things out of the way right now first uh there is going to be phone usage during the lecture so you can use the phone but I recommend instead of recording the whole lecture the whole time try to listen a lot of times you see like pictures people during concerts instead of listening to the music they're listening to their telephones so listen to me speaking try to take in the information and you can also take pictures of the slides I have some good tips there uh so yeah today we are going to be talking about a couple different things but basically the topic is top three writing tips it's actually also kind of my methodology for writing and we're going to get deep into it but um if you have like a some paper with you right now that's good paper and a pen because we're going to be of course writing you cannot write in your head you can try but it won't work um so yeah let's take a look at the next slide uh yes before we do begin thank you so much to the youth Affairs Agency for organizing this wonderful masterclass once again uh it's it's an amazing initiative and seeing things like this always warms my heart to see people striving to learn it is very important uh thank you to alishalayev and thank you to estamo Maravich you guys are awesome so yeah let's get into it uh next slide please first of all let's do this if you remember me from the last ebrat Master Class raise your hand if you remember me from the last he brought Master Class okay that's not as many people as I thought okay if you know me from my telegram Channel raise your hand nice cool cool that's good that's good okay uh last master class was um I forgot the date I think it was two months ago so if you have taken your IELTS between uh wait one sec I'm not good at mathematics [Music] what uh July yes if you have sorry if you've taken your IELTS between July and this month raise your hand okay if you are taking your IELTS this month raise your hand I see you good luck good luck okay oh there we go good uh yeah let's go to the next slide oh no the light uh cool so before we begin let's play a little activity in general today we are going to be doing two things number one you need a partner okay you need somebody like one person who you can talk to and you can discuss with one person you need to be the same level okay so right now I'm gonna give you a second look to your left look to your right find your partner right now okay does everybody have one partner if it's three people that's also okay and one more thing today we are going to have a group activity so you need to have a group of four to five people if you have some friends good if you don't have friends it's time to start making friends now you have a good opportunity yeah so uh let's get into it let's play a game real quick for this game you need your partner so if you have your partner right now uh look look at them this is the game we're gonna play It's called two truths One Lie raise your hand if you've played two truths One Lie okay not bad not bad good uh so the way this game works is like this you need to take your telephone okay so right now it's telephone time take out your telephone and then I want you to write down three facts okay write them down on your telephone uh and then I want you to make sure that two of those facts are true so like for example you know I I like to play football I like to no no true facts not something boring don't say your age don't say like I am a student something interesting okay uh so two facts should be true one fact should be a good uh yeah so do that right now I'm going to give you like a minute or two so write down on your phone two true facts one false fact right now write it down on your phone right now when you are finished look at me like this and then I will know okay I think most people are probably finished okay raise your hand if you're finished with your three facts if you wrote them down raise your hand okay I think that's most people perfect let's do this uh if you and your partner both wrote down all three of your facts what I want you to do is read all three of your facts to your partner and then your partner should guess which fact is false find out the lie so let's get into it you guys have uh I don't know like two minutes for this let's go Okay so did you finish say no if you didn't finish okay that was that was kind of quiet so I think mainly you guys are finished okay so um we're going to oh I remember you hi uh anyway yeah let's uh let's move on to the next slide please these are my three facts so let's do this uh I'm going to read them out loud to you right now uh yeah number one I once bicycled all the way to angrin you know bicycle like and back so there and back in one day fact number two I once swam across the churchik river so you know like and fact number three I am the best Tetris player in Uzbekistan okay best number one these are my three facts so what I want you to do right now is tell me which fact do you think is false this is about me these are facts about me so like with your hand show me which fact you think is false okay okay wait let's do this a little bit different let's do this I will I will say the fact and if you think it's false I want you to say no okay ready okay one okay number two okay number three you got you guys don't believe I am the best Tetris player let me tell you I am I am actually number one I'm not joking seriously I'm not the only player also there's other players believe me trust me uh yeah so number two is not true I never swam across the churchek river I hate swimming so yeah good what what does that sound can you guys hear that song is that is there a concert up there okay uh it is what it is uh let's move on to the next slide uh so oh wait back go back one go back one slide between the first and the second you brought master class that I held I actually took my IELTS test I took my outs test for the second time uh and I got my results around I think like one and a half months ago uh so today of course we are doing writing so I want to tell you about me and my background with IELTS writing as a whole so that you know you know who you're listening to uh next slide uh yeah so first of all my writing score in November 2020 was a writing seven so I got seven for writing uh let me tell you why first of all I didn't prepare for the test okay I I just I took the test for fun I didn't care too much and so that's why my writing was seven uh so after I retook the test can you can you guess what the score was so I retook the test guess guess what the score is right now just say the score okay so now imagine this imagine so I wake up so all of your ideas are the same as my ideas right I wake up the morning when I get my results right and then I get my score so my score was writing something so guess how I felt I I was not very happy but after this moment I realized that even a native speaker can maybe not get the best results for IELTS because IELTS is not like a test of only your English it's also a test of your test taking ability you need to understand how to do the test and so I decided it is time for self-improvement I am going to learn so what I did was I found an examiner in Britain a real IELTS examiner he's like I think 50 he's really old which means he's smart that's how it works I promise and yeah we are doing lessons with him and the information that I'm going to tell you today is not from me writing seven it's from an IELTS examiner like a real guy who tests your essays these are the tips that he gave me and this is what we're going to be going over today let's get into it but before we begin before we begin I do have to say one thing uh my my team are here today I'm starting an outs course this week actually tomorrow is the first day so if you're interested in that you can come up to my team anytime during today's lecture please raise your hands lecture team yeah there we go one two three uh this is my team come up to them and you could get a discount because you guys are here for about masterclass and I want to give you guys a cool discount anyway yeah uh let's get into it next slide uh real quick this is my typing speed okay I I got a bad score but I type pretty quickly uh pause real quick let me tell you so the first thing the first reason why I got writing seven right the first the first thing um this is my typing speed right 72 words per minute have you ever tested your typing speed on a computer raise your hand if yes okay raise your hand if your typing speed is 30 or below 30 words per minute or below okay raise your hand if you're typing speed is uh 50 or below pretty good pretty good raise your hand if you're typing speed is 60 or below pretty good pretty good raise your hand if it's 70 or above okay not bad good there's three people you guys you guys know what it's like so I type pretty quickly uh and if we move on to the next slide yeah uh we're gonna see this essay so imagine this essay this is actually the essay that I practiced with the night before my exam I was practicing my writing because I am a very you know uh punctual man so I was practicing the night before my exam and I uh I wrote this essay how many paragraphs do you think this essay should have I'm gonna give you a second and you can show me with your hand show me with your hand how many you think this should have not bad okay show me show me yeah yeah I want to say I want to say I want to see okay so the overwhelming majority of you is Raising did you say 10 oh my can't believe it uh yeah the overwhelming majority of you is saying four that is the correct amount of paragraphs now if we look at the next slide this is the oh this is the amount of paragraphs that I wrote yeah and you know surprisingly this is actually not a good thing you know my brain works in a pretty simple way I think more words better essay that's not how it works so yeah um this is the first reason why I got a bad score so tip number one I guess before we get into it like

tip zero don't write too many words 250 is the minimum 280 290 is like the the maximum this is how many you should actually write 290 is like perfect uh so yeah next slide let's get into the tips the technology the skills uh you should start taking a lot of pictures now because this is practical information this is like what I teach during my lessons this is like the information you know uh yeah

the first thing is the first thing is how do you get a low score for your writing what is what is the technology of getting a low score what is what is the skill you need to not read the question if you want to get a low score don't read the question if you want to get a good score read the question you know uh let's let's look at this right real quick your language skills may be good enough to earn you a band seven or eight not fully answering the question could reduce your score to a band six or even lower uh this means that you need to completely answer the whole question we're going to do some practice for this uh don't fall asleep yet we're going to be doing a lot of practical things uh 

here are the three things you need to know number one topic words number two other keywords and number three instruction words these are the words that you should be paying attention to whenever you are writing your essay and whenever you begin your planning we're gonna we're gonna break this down after a second let's let's get into it next slide so these are the topic words let's let's read this together uh students perform better in school when they're rewarded rather than punished to what extent do you agree or disagree uh yes raise your hand if you understand this question okay perfect I can I can see most people uh now tell me just say it like all together what is the topic of this question on three one two three okay I I'm not hearing guys what is the topic one two three [Music] okay just say your ideas I can hear all of you I have very good ears I promise okay uh so yeah schooling education students I heard someone say this uh overall the topic can be summarized as I guess education right School uh yeah now let's take a look at some topics that are going to be presented on your IELTS test this is basically a list of the most like common topics next slide uh yeah you can see here Health environment education development globalization public transport criminal justice youth crime youth crime I am a youth criminal uh and government spending so these are the most common uh commonly appearing topics on your IELTS test you should learn topic vocabulary for these that's kind of a thing uh yes so let's move on to the next slide we're going to see that these are the other keywords if the words that we looked at at the beginning are like the topic the general topic these words tell us exactly what the essay is going to be about you need to make sure to pay attention very very carefully to words like better rather than I guess uh when something something these kinds of words are what tell you the topic of the essay so if we move on to the next slide you should take a picture of these These are the keywords that you need to be paying attention to sorry I'm making you take so many pictures uh this presentation will actually be available later at a certain place so you don't have to take like every single picture I will tell you anyway uh yes these are the keywords that tell you the exact topic uh let's move on to the next slide lastly these are the instruction words this is basically your question and does anybody have any ideas what does this actually tell you uh oh who said type of essay raise your hand who's that type of essay perfect there we go great uh yeah it tells you what to write of course but also it tells you the type of essay let's do this real quick uh some of you guys know some of you maybe don't know raise your hand how many essay types are there raise your hand I want to see everybody's hands right now how many essay types do you know okay okay okay okay whoa that's a lot okay okay good yeah uh so roughly five some people say six some people say seven but I I say roughly five that's like my you know classic number uh and these are the essay types that we're going to be talking about today preparing for today uh and and learning today yeah here here you can see them yeah uh the essay types go like this opinion double question discussion Advantage disadvantage uh and problem solution the reason why they're organized like this is not because I thought it looked pretty even though I do think it looks very pretty the reason why it's organized like this is because the first two are mainly focused on your opinion they're mainly focused on what you think they're focused on what kind of information you know and they encourage personal examples the second two essays are mainly focused on what you think about some kind of topic so for example you know what kind of problems do cars have and how can we solve these problems it's not necessarily your personal examples about cars it's about General so the last two are more General the first two are more about you they're more personal and the one in the middle is of course in the middle you have to do what so maybe you guys know discussion what is the instruction words for the discussion type question do you know instruction words okay Can someone say it louder I I heard you say do you want to say it louder that was a loud voice good great job discuss both views and give your opinion so here you have two main tasks discuss both views and perfect remember these two tasks should never interact the way that you write a bad essay is by mixing all of this so it's like you have one and two opinion in the first paragraph your opinion in the third paragraph no no and there's no structure there's no logic that is how you write a bad essay we're gonna we're gonna get more in depth about this but yeah let's move on to the next slide so these are the instruction words that you're going to see for opinion type questions what is your opinion do you agree or disagree to what extent do you agree or disagree keep in mind that all three of these mean the same exact thing so if it says to what extent do you agree disagree that doesn't mean you should change your structures next slide this is an example question uh we're going to be going back to this question uh so yeah you can take a picture of it now but this is going to be useful for you later let's read it together space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things what is your opinion uh yeah next slide double question so for this type of question the only instruction words that you're going to see are two questions that are topic related so there's no phrase that you can like see to understand what you need to write it's just going to be two questions about some kind of topic that's it that's all you need to know uh next slide please thank you uh success is often measured by wealth and material positions so money uh do you think wealth is the best measure of success what makes a successful person so again these two questions are topic related there's no like words that you can see uh keep in mind keep in mind real quick these two questions should not connect they should not interact one paragraph you answer one question second paragraph you answer the second question simple don't make them connect next paragraph next slide discuss both views and give your opinion discussion simple some people think that the government should provide free education at every level however some people say that individuals should pay for their University education discuss both views and give your opinion classic discussion type question we're going to be seeing more of this quite soon I'm just introducing you to our new friends these are our new friends next slide Advantage disadvantage the two questions that you're going to be seeing are what are the advantages and disadvantages of blank some kind of topic and do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages the answer is always yes I think so uh yeah next slide space exploration costs taxpayers an exorbitant amount of money each year do you guys know what the word exorbitant means somebody want to say it louder again okay I heard someone say expensive exorbitant means very large amount of money usually too high uh do you guys know any synonyms for this word good excessive what would you say can you say it louder significant okay that's a good word uh do you guys know any phrasal words like phrases or phrasal verbs that fit this place as a synonym oh yeah there we go Perfect rip off exactly yeah awesome uh next slide lastly our problem and solution type essays what are the causes of this problem what Solutions can you suggest uh whatever kind of variation like you know uh what problems does this cause or what Solutions can you think of all of this is exactly the same they just want you to think about problems and they want you to think about Solutions that's it uh overpopulation in many Urban centers around the world is a major problem what are the causes of this how can this problem be solved uh yeah so that's it we're finished with this segment let's move on to the next slide all right so real quick let's discuss uh this this this slide is blank on purpose there's a reason why the slide is blank we're going to do a little bit of interaction so uh why do you think it is important to know your question type I'm going to be going down and I'm going to be asking you and I'm going to be giving you the microphone so I want you to tell me your ideas why do you think essay type is important what are the reasons for this so let's go let's go if you want to raise your hand and give your ideas anybody have any ideas why is essay type important why do you need to know what kind of essay you're writing okay perfect uh okay anyone else any ideas raise your hand raise your hand if you want to talk okay cool let's go deep okay uh ma'am over there do you want to come over here if you want to talk come come come come perfect come throw it that's a great idea thank you okay here uh can you pass this along past this yeah no it's being out of topic it's the really vital to know the type of essay it's the first thing and the second thing not mix the ideas uh in order to and now the type of essay we have to know this kind of type of essay so it's my idea very good awesome thank you very much great ideas okay somebody else there's a lady there in the back okay I'm gonna go around okay you two are gonna be lost people give me a second wait I'm gonna run around this is my exercise for the whole week guys get ready oh yeah our essay will be measured by task response questions and cohesion vocabulary and grammatical accuracy so the type of the essay is really important in order to get high score from task response so firstly we have to pay attention to the type of the essay then we should and begin writing the essay okay time for sports all right awesome yeah uh of course task response has been mentioned I think like two times it is one of the four marking criteria which means if you do not have task response you do not have a good essay uh let's take a look at some examples next yeah so uh first of all every single essay type will have different structures you need to have different information and in order to have different kinds of information you need to have a different structure as you guys said next slide you need to have different approaches of course the information is going to be different and because of this uh the structure also needs to change hello Shuffle back how you doing did you get did you get the paper he got the paper guys let's give her an Applause yes good job Shuffle back yeah there we go we were we were looking for paper it's very important you're gonna you're gonna see it later anyway perfect next slide uh of course the essays are sometimes going to be different length a lot of teachers actually recommend a five essay structure for discussion essays uh I'm not sure whether we have time for that today but but yes there's sometimes different links for your essays next slide next slide please ma'am please I beg you oh perfect uh yes there are variations for the introductions the introduction is going to have a different structure and you're going to be including different information depending on what is actually in your essay next slide uh one more thing is opinion or no opinion not every single essay requires you to say I believe that not not all of them care about you I'm sorry but IELTS doesn't always care about you maybe you didn't know this but they don't they're very mean people uh yes and I think last one uh see that transition plan differently you need to plan differently according to what question type you have uh and this is actually going to be a beautiful transition I'm I'm such a good transition person next slide plan tip number two so uh this is what we're gonna be doing right now uh we're gonna be brainstorming so plan pertains to several things once we have finished analyzing our question once we have understood exactly what the question is about uh we are going to be uh we're going to be we're going to be what we're gonna be thinking of ideas so let's do this um three tips number one you brainstorm which means you think as quickly as possible even if you don't think your idea is good write it down anyway because it's going to be very helpful it doesn't matter like what the idea is number one number two you have to think about ideas for both sides this is important if you only write ideas for one side your opinion is going to be not as you know 3D three-dimensional it's going to be like blank uh and last thing you need to choose the side that fits the best this is of course your opinion anyway let's move on to the next slide uh oh one second okay so right now we're gonna do an exercise to see how these ideas work so if you go on telegram right now get out your phones uh go over there I'm going to send an activity we're going to be doing this right now so open your telephones and give me one second one second okay perfect uh okay so raise your hand if you see the question that I sent into the group open your telegram right now we're doing an activity if you see the question that I sent into the group please raise your hand Alex native IELTS I'm going to give you guys one more second to open your Telegram okay you guys see it see the question okay all right so I'm gonna send the essay after one second okay you guys see the essay yes no yes you see it perfect so this is what we're going to be doing I want you to read this essay right now read the whole essay and what I want you to do is I want you to think about the main ideas of the essay this shouldn't take too long all you need to do is you need to analyze what are the opinions right so for example uh if we look at this first of all the question is a big salary is much more important than job satisfaction do you agree or disagree uh so what we need to do is we need to go through the first paragraph and then the second paragraph sorry it's not the first the second and the third paragraph uh we need to read them and we need to figure out what are they actually saying what are they talking about after you're finished write down your idea using keywords only the main topics and I want you to send your ideas into the discussion of the uh of the post okay so the discussion of the essay right here so send send your like opinion of the topics uh and ideas in this chat right here we're going to be discussing and we're going to be seeing what is this essay really about by the way this essay was written by me so I'm going to give you guys I think around maybe four minutes for this uh if you don't have your Telegram and you're taking pictures of me you should have your telegram right now so you can do some reading uh it'll it'll be helpful for you remember once you're finished writing down your ideas feel free to send them into the chat and we're going to be discussing right now so I will read your ideas and the things that you write please try to write both ideas in the same message so write idea one idea two in the same message so that I can see everything more comfortably okay idea one idea two in one message remember you're not writing your own ideas even though those are also important right now we are analyzing the essay so you are reading the essay and you are looking for the ideas in the essay itself not your own ideas but the S the ideas in the essay understand yeah yeah okay so the time is finished let me read a couple of the examples that I thought were good uh in general great job for doing this it is very important to understand two things right you can write your idea completely you can have like all of the words all the vocabulary but if you don't have the complete understanding of what you're actually writing it doesn't matter how many you know cool words you use you need to completely understand your ideas in order to express them well so let me read some examples number one idea one this is written by m with a line idea one even though you can enjoy doing your lovely job it might not be lucrative idea number two having an exorbitant salary provides you a lot of things idea number one job satisfaction cannot bring necessary funds idea number two having a high income gives great status so in general this this essay was about those two main things it's perfect we have a team okay uh so here is the next thing this is where this is what we're going to be doing together with your partner I want you to choose one of these essay types so sorry not essay types but one of these essays and I want you to write your main ideas together by doing this together you have a chance to talk with another person and you have a chance to completely think through all of your ideas okay so working together discuss the problems and the solutions okay these three are all problem solution type essays so again I want you to discuss with your partner and write down your ideas after this I want you to send this into the chat we're going to be also discussing this having some uh having some conversations about this so yeah you can do it in the same chat so here still in this essay at the bottom okay so choose one of these any one that you like and I want you to write number one the number of the essay so for example like essay one essay two sa3 and I want you to write your ideas so paragraph one paragraph two everybody understands raise your hand if you understand okay that's not too many hands but okay that's fine thank you all right so yes do this right now with your partner remember you have a partner yes okay you have six minutes for this okay once again raise your hand if you have a partner if you have a partner I see some people who don't have Partners raise your hand if you have a partner everybody please raise your hand if you have a partner keep it raised I want to see everybody hints raise your hand if you happen ma'am no partner okay gentlemen you have a partner yes maybe no okay uh you can put your hands down listen doing this is very important because later we're going to be doing a game and we're going to be doing something similar but in a team so together with your partner start working right now okay we're gonna be doing this as a team later so you need to get ready to do this right now so yeah again choose one of the topics and write down your main ideas only the main ideas like you know Pro or con whatever you agree with you guys have two and a half minutes remember to write down your ideas great job to everybody participating all right everybody your time is almost finished raise your hand if you already submitted your ideas raise your hand great great I see some rice that's good there we go good good very nice uh it's a very good idea to plan ahead of the essay just so you know the recommended amount of time to plan is around five minutes at the beginning of your task two you have five minutes just to write down as many ideas as you can all of the topics everything so it's a very important step uh okay real quick let's let's read let's read some of your comments okay I think a lot of people chose the second question let me let me read this many opportunities this is written by dildora many opportunities for people to study work and uh to study work and live creating the same opportunities and living chances in suburbs uh I think that's not the second one that's the first question good um marjona negative impacts are a waste of time this is the second one it is harmful for health especially for the eyes in the brain causing laziness and affecting badly to your studies uh and what can be done to decrease this parents or teachers must control their children they must be taught to use computers for necessary purposes to spend time on computer effectively enough all right very nice um let's see if there's somebody for the third question raise your hand if you chose the third question ah good job okay there's like two people so number three why is this the case uh there's things that even human beings can do there's still some diseases that can be cured so cool uh all right [Music] good all right so everybody come back to me stop paying attention to your phones that's it thank you thank you good good job okay so um did you write down your ideas at least for one of the topics raise your hand if you wrote down your ideas perfect I think I think most people did if you at least discussed that's already a very important step so after we have analyzed the question after we have understood completely what is the topic what are we actually supposed to write the next step is of course to plan

so the first step let's let's just go back to the first one uh first step is we uh we what what is the first step remember there's one word one word starts the letter A analyze the second step is what okay discuss if you're with your friend but if you're on the test by yourself you cannot discuss okay good so the first step is analyzed the second one is plan and let's move on to the third one organize so let's say them all together so let's go just on three so step one step two step three perfect uh this is kind of like my acronym I don't I don't have any cool names for it but yes analyze plan organize

so after we have created all of our ideas we need to have a logical order for them uh this is specifically useful whenever you have more than one idea for each paragraph but today we're gonna be focusing mainly on like uh other types of stuff but but yes anyway first consider logical uh order of ideas think about what ideas and topics you can use to transition from one idea to the next does anybody know what is a transition maybe you want to want to tell us do you guys know what is a transition sentence transition no not not in not in Microsoft PPT I mean like uh during your essay what is a transition sentence you can raise your hand if you want to talk raise your hand if you want to talk into the microphone anybody any volunteers oh who where show me who raise your hand I can't see am I blind oh there we go ma'am perfect yes now we have somebody else to do sports for me he is a lot more fit um I think the transition sentence uh it connects the two topics and kind of like it's a transition Center so it's connected to topics for example if uh in the first sentence something a and the second B in the topic They're Gonna Be A and B so perfect awesome very good let's have a round of applause great good job yes awesome yeah exactly a transition is indeed something that takes you from point A to point B in order to have good coherence and cohesion for your essay you need to have good transition sentences and you need to have a logical flow from the beginning of your essay to the end and transitions are what do this for you uh yes let's actually move on to the next slide here's an example this is also a an essay that I wrote and this is specifically not transition sentences but this is the ideas this is the planning so uh let's let's read the question together discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers While others think that this is the role of parents and I did not write the question because the question is a discussion so you know what that is uh the topic is what any ideas the topic so the first type of keyword the general topic what is this essay about generally education education children's Behavior I guess children that can also be the topic yes great and any ideas about what is the specific topic the second type of keyword okay responsibility respect discipline I hear some good words yes also you can say problem in modern schools that's also a type of a thing that can be keep in mind even though it says problem in modern schools this is not a problem solution type essay anyway here are the ideas that I wrote so paragraph on teachers teachers have the tools to help children and provide results uh sorry teachers have the tools to help children and provide results with behavior can provide better results for children sorry that's the same idea same idea guys sorry a paragraph two parents because children spend their time spend their most of time with their parents also Idols whose Behavior children follow this was copied from my chat I forgot to edit I apologize okay anyway do you understand these ideas okay uh there is a flow between these ideas I could explain these ideas kind of in speaking that is how you can check whether your ideas make a make logical sense uh because what is on the page is usually difficult to understand whether it's logical but while you're speaking it makes more sense so let me kind of give an example discipline is a problem in modern schools uh this is the the planning for the essay sorry that took a while uh so these are the ideas let me kind of read this there are several Arguments for both for example teachers should be responsible for discipline at schools because they have the tools to help children behave better and this can provide results with their behavior parents can be held responsible for discipline schools because children spend most of their time with their parents and thus they follow the same behavioral patterns so this is all of those four ideas that you saw in that other slide together in two sentences right so what we're going to be doing is we're going to be practicing this right now okay so here we're going to do some paraphrasing you can do some paraphrasing at home I will actually send this presentation into my channel so you can see it later yes so we're going to do an activity did you guys find a team for yourself yes raise your hand if you found a team your team needs to have at least four and maximum five people or maximum six so you need to get a team right now I'm gonna give you a couple seconds find a team you can have like two and two or you can have three into as many as many as you want you need to have a team get a team right now are you in the process of getting a team it's a little bit awkward okay talking to new people can be hard I know it's also hard for me let's do this once you have your team once you've figured out who is on your team do like a little introduction you know hi my name is Alex I go to school I'm five years old do a little introduction talk to each other you know whatever uh and then we are going to start so I'm going to give you a couple seconds talk to your team talk to the people on your team your name who you are Etc go okay good uh I think most people have began organizing their teams we're going to do a competition of this topic right here so together with your team I want you to number one I want you to create a team name this is very important you cannot just say like you know we are team number one think of an interesting team name make it something in English make it like a joke don't make it anything vulgar please no swearing words no swearing uh yeah make it like a like a cool team name and then here's what I want you guys to do is everybody listening to me can everybody hear me okay good good stop discussing for one second I know that team names are very important okay uh but we need to get the topic right now so here's the topic uh as video games have been becoming more and more developed they are becoming a form of Art to what extent do you agree or disagree with this view here's what I want you to do I want you to plan your ideas so as you have seen over the course of today uh we have been planning which means we have been creating like two topics three topics things like that you need to plan your ideas for the essay and then you need to write an introduction okay so together with your team you need to write one introduction and at least two ideas more ideas is better remember maximum four maximum four ideas so at least two ideas and an introduction for this topic does everybody understand raise your hand if you understand good so uh we are going to have one second let me check I think we're already a little bit is it okay for a little bit late a little bit thank you so much okay so you guys have uh six minutes for this try to make sure to include everybody from your team you guys need to have at least four main ideas and you need to have an introduction and remember the most important thing you need to have a team name good so after this you should write it in the uh in the channel I will make a post okay so you guys have five minutes you may begin sorry six minutes okay there's about one minute left if you are on your team but you are not actively writing here's something you can do you can go on uh Instagram if you have an Instagram and you can make a stories and you can tag me saying Alex native IELTS and send me a plus and I will send you my top 10 tips for speaking which was actually the topic of my previous lecture if you were there you already had them if you were not at my previous lecture you can get my speaking tips I have speaking nine So speaking is kind of like you know my my expertise my expert area so yeah if you're interested in my top 10 speaking tips send me a Plus on Instagram Alex native Iles and we have about 30 seconds left so finish writing your essays sorry your introductions and your topics and then we're going to be moving on okay so uh everybody thank you all so much pause for a second okay so everybody everybody uh by the end of today I will be making an announcement about the team that won and you guys are gonna get a special prize we're gonna be going through the winning team will get a bonus I will message you I will announce it and I want the winning team all of you to come to me and I will be giving you a bonus uh one more thing is if you write ebook start to Alex nine Alex that's my account or if you come to my team you can get a 10 discount on my course uh anyway yeah so I think that is about next slide next one that is about it for my uh part of the lecture we're also gonna be doing other stuff please no matter how interesting it is to talk about video games as art let's pay all of our attention to the next speaker who is sir are you ready let's give a round of applause thank you and thank you all for participating