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the bolded word is the wrong one and the sentence after the equal sign (=) is the correct or revised sentence.

My firts visit to Singapore = My first visit to Singapore

I go there with my friends Eddy to attend youth conference. = I am going there with my friend Eddy to attend a youth conference.

We arrived lately to Harbourfront because we did not got an earlier fly. = We arrived late to Harbourfront because we did not get an earlier fly.

Upon arriving we are very confusing and nervous because there were no one to picks us up. = Upon arriving we were very confused and nervous because there was no one to pick us up.

Later we obtain some instructions of how could we get to Expo where the conference were being holded. = Later we obtained some instructions on how could we get to the Expo where the conference was being held.

We was asked to = We were asked to

the first time we go to Singapore and we didn't really knew what to expect. = the first time we went to Singapore and we didn't know what to expect.

We walked out of Harbourfront like two silly guy with suitcase. = We walked out of Harbourfront like two silly guys with suitcases.

I saw Indian security guard and ask them = I saw an Indian security guard and asked them

I am quite shock because he spoke very fastly. = I am quite shocked because he spoke very fastly.

I do not really understand what did he say, in fact, I just looked to his gestures when he pointed the way we need to go. = I did not understand what he said, in fact, I just looked at his gestures when he pointed the way we needed to go.

We finally manage to find the MRT station after ask some more peoples, but the adventure had not finish yet. = We finally managed to find the MRT station after asking some more people, but the adventure had not finished yet.

The station were very crowded. = The station was very crowded.

insert some money and get two one- way tickets. = inserted some money and got two one-way tickets.

Next, we saw the map posting on the wall and tried to understand them. = Next, we saw the map posted on the wall and tried to understand it.

we tap the electronic ticket = we tapped the electronic ticket

our MRT comes = our MRT came

I would loved to say = I would love to say

The real problem occur = The real problem occurs

We tap the cards, but we could not passed the gate. = We tapped the cards, but we could not pass the gate.

didn't worked = didn't work

My friend saw a small side doors and immediately walk through it. = My friend saw a small side door and immediately walked through it.

We were shocked, embarrassing and afraid of. = We were shocked, embarrassed, and afraid of.

to hers what has happened. = to her what had happened.

She explained the problem to we. = She explained the problem to us.

She tells us that the amount of money in our cards were not enough, so we had to pays some more moneys in order to pass the gate. = She told us that the amount of money in our cards was not enough, so we had to pay some more money to pass the gate.

Finally, we get to Expo where the conference is being held, we felt so relieve when we meet our friends there. = Finally, we got to the Expo where the conference was being held, we felt so relieved when we meet our friends there.

They bursted into laughter = They burst into laughter

I often smiled when i remember the incident. = I often smile when I remember the incident.

note : Pay attention to the grammar, and the capitalization of pronouns.